One dark night there was a glow in the tent. We got scared. Mum and dad my sister and Naia were scared as well. We tried going to sleep but we just couldn't sleep. We were too scared. We got out of the tent . We started to laugh and smile because it was only a glow in the sky.
To Naroa
ReplyDeleteWonderful writing! I like how you included how you felt in the story. I am glad it was only a glow in the sky and not anything scary!
Next time you could try to use different sentence beginnings. Did you notice that you have used the same word to start nearly every sentence?
From Mrs Natusch
Do you know what the glow was?
ReplyDeleteto naroa cool work it was cool
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ReplyDeleteI like your writing because you wrote an interesting story about the dark night.
from Tyra-Leigh
You are awesome. Love Dad
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